Tuesday, September 29, 2009

redone pages

here are the first 6 completed pages so far (the actual first page is still pending. It's supposed to be an establishing shot but I'm too lazy to draw it at the moment). I re-colored all of the pages since the last critique, and I also blacked in Vlad's suit and learned how to color lineart. I'm still trying to find a font that works with the drawings, so yeah, I know my handwriting is not up to par.


  1. I like to bring the beverages to your comic.
    casa bonita.


  2. It might be an idea to just use your own handwriting instead of looking for a font, since it has the same flair as your art style and I feel it would help unify the text with the artwork.

  3. emilee-

    i agree with cathy. i would just tighten it up a bit.

    here are my notes:
    pg.1-what is the establishing shot going to be? inside, outside, in the hallway (with words coming from a door)?
    pg.2-add a bit of color to panels 3 and 4 ...or at least 4.
    pg.3-maybe fill in "is" and "this" with blue to add more power.
    pg.4-make "mute" on the tv blue. fill in "shut up" and add a bit more color to the bottom panels. they don't feel strong enough to support the ones above.
    pg.6-i don't need the underline on "you" the italics does enough by itself.
    pg.7-in panel 4 add color between rott and martinis heads so they don't become conjoined. vlad and bailey should though based on their positioning.

    keep 'em coming!

  4. Ok, I'll be more careful with the lettering next time then! It looked a lot neater before I inked it.

    Ok, I edited the things you mentioned. I'm going to post them as links instead of posting a whole new entry. You can just copy and paste the links in the URL field to see them.

    Page one looks like this: http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v201/DarkSilicon/ology%20pages/DSCN0513.jpg . I took the photo, and at the bottom I added some people and 'animal people' walking at the bottom. It's just sketched right now.

    page 2: http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v201/DarkSilicon/ology%20pages/02-1.png

    page 3: http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v201/DarkSilicon/ology%20pages/03-1.png

    page 4: http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v201/DarkSilicon/ology%20pages/04-1.png

    page 5: http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v201/DarkSilicon/ology%20pages/05-1.png (no changes)

    page 6: http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v201/DarkSilicon/ology%20pages/06-1.png

    page 7: http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v201/DarkSilicon/ology%20pages/07.png

    hopefully that's better!